Excellent story, can\'t wait until the next chapter. It has a lot of potential. Great Stuff

Nicely done. I thought you portrayed our hero and heroine admirably. I particularly delighted in perusing through the heartfelt conversation between Harry and Hermione on the train. I thought that was masterful, Despite this, it was distressing to fined Harry going through such difficult times in his life.

I believe Hermione will eventually figure out that neither Obvious Ron or Oblivious Harry is worse. She'll come to the realization that Oblivious Hermione is, in fact, far worse.

I was wondering, do you intend to go through the whole of sixth and seventh years?

Hope to read more from you.

Rick

nicely done... It's a very good point at which to change the story and the changes you've chosen to make are more interesting than most we see.

I look forward to more.

I can't WAIT to read the next chapter. Hope to see more soon. Keep up the good work.

This has an intriguing begining and great characterization of the main protagonists. Please continue.

Eagerly awaiting your nest post.
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Awesome chapter/start, I LOVED it!!!! Great Hermione POV, you did a wonderful job on her thoughts!! I loved the potion idea, and how she's dealing with Harry and his feelings!! I definitely Can't Wait to see what happens next!!!! This is a brilliant plot for this time line! Again, Awesome start and please keep up the Amazing work!!!! Thanks for sharing!! Take Care, Amber

Wow! You're off the a very fine start. I can't wait to see what else you come up with. I have the feeling that things will not go well at the Dursley's. Will Hermione come to the rescue? Great job!

This a fairly good start for a story. I'm never really certain how to handle extended descriptions or scenes from canon, so setting them off like that does work but it interrupts the flow a bit.

my only quibble would be that a galleon must be a bigger coin than I imagined. at eight ounces it's pretty good sized compared to other coins, even gold.

However, it's a very good beginning and I'm looking forward to seeing where this leads.

apAidan

Thats really really good, i loved it, please update soon i am hooked already

Thank you for this story and the time
and effort that you have put in to it.
Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy
your self when you write and have fun
in your life when you can.

This is very interesting, and good characterizations, indeed. I'm looking forward to where this is going to go. Good job!

Good job so far, i'm interested in reading more Keep up the good work and hope u update soon!

Good Work. U potray Hermione's thoughts quite well,no doubt. Though i expect hermione's romantic feelings for harry to be potrayed in the following chapters.So please update soon!

I wasn't sure what to think of this piece at first, it being a bit more "formal" in writing style than I am accustomed to, but I adjusted quickly enough once Hermione's interaction with Harry actually started. I'm not sure if that's me personally or not, but I would definitely mark that as the strongest point in your writing.

Other than the occasional typo (most looked like you hadn't decided which phrasing to use and left both sets visible) I was a bit confused though on a couple of small facts here and there. Obviously, this is set at the end of the fifth year, yet you make a couple of references to Ginny & Luna taking their O.W.L.s. I assume you just meant their end-of-year-exams, but I just wanted to bring it to your attention for any necessary corrections you might want to make.

Also, I think it would help the reader stay in the narrative if you left the notes about your extended quotes from canon to the A/Ns at the beginning or end. They can be a little distracting, and while I know you probably felt them intrinsic to your story, I think all you need are the fancy punctuation marks and italics to remind the reader what they're from.

I can't wait to see where this goes, though, particularly when it comes to Harry and Hermione's deepening relationship (might you shed some light on why exactly the potion was so strong and made her blush...? *wink, wink*).

H&H4EVA
Hermione Rae

that was good, very enjoyable. You got the characters pretty right - I look forward to seeing where you take this. good work